So......updating early in hopes that people might comment turned out to be a bust. I talked to some people outside of the class in hopes that they'd have feedback, and made some changes. I didn't have time to color it again, but here's the black and white sketch. Just imagine the original colors on this one. Mostly I removed the top screen and put it lower, and added in a blackberry-type device that he's holding up there instead. I redrew some of the people to make them more a little more interesting, also.
3 comments:
i think this is really successfull so far actually. im glad you moved the screen to the bottom, it definitely was sort of strange sititng up there, but im wondering if you need it at all? i mean the remote gets the point across, though it does make it more related to the op-ed piece if he's physically watching, but it sort of messes with the composition a little. then again, i think no matter where you put it it might be strange, because you really couldnt fit a screen in between those seats anywhere, heh. that's the only suggestion i have, and i was really looking for something so i don't know that it's that big a deal. you have a really good sense of people, they all have personality and they all have a look about them ive seen on people before, it's really fun to look at.
-ashley
hey sam, yeah i'm glad you moved the flatscreen, it's definately less distracting and more readable now. i actually think it works quite well between the seats. I agree with ashley, these characters have very different and interesting personalities. good luck
Man this one is a MONSTER! I think at this point (revision) I'd say my only major conflict is that the mousepad on lap thing is kinda bugging me a little bit. Maybe if the guy were fatter so we knew for sure it was on his stomach and it wasn't some creepy tech-groping. I dunno, think about it. It seems like you have a really solid handle on it.
-------->d.
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