because there are so many cellphones and game consoles out there right now, i think the products in both images will need more detail in order for the audience to distinguish the products from the others. also i think it would be more interesting to not have the word "NOKIA" written within the illustration- and have the phone be shown in a different way. I think the bottom composition is pretty cool though....
I quite like the idea of the couple interacting in a public sphere, but the general feel i get is one of holiday shopping and crowds, and confusion... maybe if stylistically or through color, composition, etc. you could seperate the two from the rest of the people. The second one I like less, because it looks like they are both fed up with eachother, if it is meant to be humorous, maybe push it a bit... or make it more loving... interesting compositions, though...
These look pretty clunky to me. I think you need to venture outside of this cartooning style. The couple at the top looks pretty ok to me, but the people in the background look pretty iffy. Also I think we need to see the object a little more clearly (detail). Ditch the Nokia sign. The one at the bottom I like less. Think about the audience for this magazine again. We need people who look more contemporary. Pick up some magazines or something. They look too highschool/ college slacker. Try to approach this with a little more grace and style. Humor is fine, but refine it a little. Think about the function of the object more. Make it more than a prop.
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because there are so many cellphones and game consoles out there right now, i think the products in both images will need more detail in order for the audience to distinguish the products from the others. also i think it would be more interesting to not have the word "NOKIA" written within the illustration- and have the phone be shown in a different way. I think the bottom composition is pretty cool though....
I quite like the idea of the couple interacting in a public sphere, but the general feel i get is one of holiday shopping and crowds, and confusion... maybe if stylistically or through color, composition, etc. you could seperate the two from the rest of the people. The second one I like less, because it looks like they are both fed up with eachother, if it is meant to be humorous, maybe push it a bit... or make it more loving... interesting compositions, though...
These look pretty clunky to me. I think you need to venture outside of this cartooning style. The couple at the top looks pretty ok to me, but the people in the background look pretty iffy. Also I think we need to see the object a little more clearly (detail). Ditch the Nokia sign. The one at the bottom I like less. Think about the audience for this magazine again. We need people who look more contemporary. Pick up some magazines or something. They look too highschool/ college slacker. Try to approach this with a little more grace and style. Humor is fine, but refine it a little. Think about the function of the object more. Make it more than a prop.
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