my theme is nature. the title page scanned wierd. sorry. it doesnt actually have that horizontal line and shift in tone. im just bad at using computers.
Hey, Danny. I like the two lower spots you've done a lot. They're nice and weird. I think, though, that the Crunch and the Thud pieces are too similar, so I'd change one of them, preferably Crunch. The text on Crunch is a little difficult to read, and I think Thud is just better overall.
As far as the main page goes, I like how everything's drawn (especially the sweet water you do), but I think you need to focus things a little more.
I really love that weird-ass bird in the full page. But I think that perhaps the text doesn't fit into the composition well, especially when in the spots the text is integrated so tightly into the drawings.
Hi Danny. I really like the bear and elephant one, very smart and i enjoy the contrast between your line work and the white space and the texture you create. those two seem the most sophisticated. the cover idea is good, and i love the bird with the umbrella, but the tree is more stereotypical and less interesting. also, compositionally you just have four seperate elements, maybe it would be more interesting if there was a variation in scale, or if they interacted more? good job, though!
I too think the deer hoof is kinda like the mammoth one. I think the mammoth foot doest need the human feet under it. I think it's be better if it were a different creature under its foot. If not the human feet should match the other cartoon style better. Also, maybe think about doing a deers antlers scraping tree branches. They do that. It might look cool?
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Hey, Danny. I like the two lower spots you've done a lot. They're nice and weird. I think, though, that the Crunch and the Thud pieces are too similar, so I'd change one of them, preferably Crunch. The text on Crunch is a little difficult to read, and I think Thud is just better overall.
As far as the main page goes, I like how everything's drawn (especially the sweet water you do), but I think you need to focus things a little more.
Crunch: I think if you show the whole deer, or maybe just all four feet crunching leaves, it will make more sense.
The bear teeth are really nice!
I really love that weird-ass bird in the full page. But I think that perhaps the text doesn't fit into the composition well, especially when in the spots the text is integrated so tightly into the drawings.
Hi Danny. I really like the bear and elephant one, very smart and i enjoy the contrast between your line work and the white space and the texture you create. those two seem the most sophisticated. the cover idea is good, and i love the bird with the umbrella, but the tree is more stereotypical and less interesting. also, compositionally you just have four seperate elements, maybe it would be more interesting if there was a variation in scale, or if they interacted more? good job, though!
I too think the deer hoof is kinda like the mammoth one. I think the mammoth foot doest need the human feet under it. I think it's be better if it were a different creature under its foot. If not the human feet should match the other cartoon style better. Also, maybe think about doing a deers antlers scraping tree branches. They do that. It might look cool?
Thanks!
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